Friday, February 1, 2013

JCCS Academic Language Assessment Week 21

Performance enhancing drugs, such as steroids,should not be allowed in sports. For example, taking steroids is making it unfair to other players that play sports. In addition, in all sports there is a TRADITION of not using drugs. Also, by doing these drugs it's hurting your body and actually weakening it too. Another reason is when your taking steroids it isn't you playing. (To see the detailed rubric that explains how your paragraph will be graded view the attachment to this assignment.)

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  1. Brian, your paragraph contains plenty of commentary, but you need concrete details to support your topic sentence. Remember that those are facts. Also, we are now writing using two chunks in each paragraph. Remember to follow the sentence starters and use the format next time.

    Oh! One more thing. Remember to use all three words next time. You forgot period and primary this time.

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